Sunday, December 1, 2013

Unconditional Love

Unconditional Love
            I hated the idea of going to a private school. When my parents made this terrible decision to send me to Northeast Christian Academy I battled them through the whole process. Every night we would argue and fight because I did not want to go there. I was only in the eighth grade at the time. The ninth grade had their own campus it merged all the eighth graders from four middle schools in my area. I wanted to go to the ninth grade campus with all of my friends from the other middle schools. Instead of being excited about the transition into ninth with everyone I was faced with a series of entrance examinations that the private school gave.
My parents knew Mrs. Peggy, the counselor of NCA for years. I grew up with her grandson and played basketball on a community league her husband coached for years. I was unaware Mrs. Peggy was in charge of going over the entrance examinations. I sat across from her at her desk as she reviewed my test scores. She instantly became pissed at me for. Mrs. Peggy is a heavier set woman, when she is angry you don’t want to be in her way, but you especially don’t want to be the person her anger is geared towards.
She said, “Your scores averaged at a fifth grade level. Did you even try on this?”
I replied, “yes I did try, I tried very hard.” But of course she knew I was lying to her.
“Sandra, you will take this exam again in my office. If I don’t think your trying I’m going to tell Hal and he will make you run suicides until I say so, don’t test me.”
All I could respond with was “Yes ma’am.” As I left her office I could hear her calling my mom already to reschedule another examination.
            While I sat outside the school waiting on my sister to pick me up I kept thinking this is not what I want. I don’t even attend church. My brothers and sister did not go to a private school why should I be forced to? I could only think of this opportunity as a punishment. When Kris arrived it was a quiet car ride, she knew I was upset about having to go to this school. So instead of going home Kris took me to Taco Bell. After we ordered our tacos, got our drinks and chose a table to sit at her questions began.
“So mom told me you failed the entrance exams. Why? How did this happen?
I said,  “I did not know, I tried very hard.”
Kris wrinkled her nose raised her eyebrow as she peered at me, “Sandra you didn’t test at a fifth grade level when you were a fifth grader. I wont tell mom and dad I just want to know. Did you do fail on purpose?”
Her questioning was so blunt and to the point I could not help but to try and hold back my cricked smile as I told her, “I don’t want to leave my friends.”
She responded with, “you are not leaving your friends behind. Your friends are your friends no matter where you go, your just expanding your network.” I sat and thought about what Kris said while I ate my taco. “What if I don’t make any friends? What if I don’t fit in at NCA? I don’t even know anyone that goes there.”
Kris told me, “screw’em, if they don’t like you too bad. Just be yourself and you will make friends. I like you and you’re my sister.” I laughed and instantly felt better.
My sister has always taken responsibility for me. When I wanted to learn to ride a bicycle Kris was quick to show me how. When Kris started playing volleyball I wanted to play also. I did not want to admit to her I didn’t want to go to NCA is because I wanted to go where her and my brother had gone to high school. Kris is more like my mom to me at times than a sister. My parents vacation so much I grew accustom to her looking after my older brother and I. Kris also grew accustom to watching after us, she became very good at tell if I was lying.
When Kris pulled into the driveway to our house she told me, “just go to your room and let me talk to mom and dad.” I don’t know what was said but I did not get into any trouble for failing the exam. The next morning Kris brought me back up to NCA for me to retake my entrance exams. When we walked into the school Kris politely informed the lady sitting behind the front desk in the lobby that I am here to take the entrance exam. I could see Kris looking around at all the students in their navy blue polo collard shirts with the NCA logo and pressed khaki pants while the lady called Mrs. Peggy on the phone. Kris expresses herself through her stylish clothes and hairstyles so I knew she was not impressed with the uniforms. When Kris’s eyes met with mine she leaned in close and whispered to me “pass this test and I will color your hair before you have to start school here,” my face light up with joy. Kris had recently finished cosmetology school and I wanted her to color my hair but she kept telling me I was to young.
Once I finished my exam Mrs. Peggy had me stand there while she reviewed it. After she finished she looked up over her reading glasses and said, “Sandra this test actually reflects the wonderful young lady I know and love!” I smiled and said “Thank you, I am sorry for causing you trouble.” She stood up and gave me a huge hug and said “I think you will be happier here than what you are expecting.” She walked me to the front lobby of the school where I saw Kris sitting patiently by the attendance desk and texting on her phone. Kris looked up from her phone and smiled at Mrs. Peggy and I. She instantly stood up and put her phone away.
I asked, “Have you been waiting this whole time for me?”
Kris responded. “Iv been out here talking to Mrs. Whitehead here, she’s in charge of the attendance here and she has been telling me about your new school. Good afternoon Mrs. Peggy, how’d our girl do on her test?”
Mrs. Peggy gave Kris a hug and told her, “Sandra passed all her exams this time, I was worried there for a minute, I thought was going to have to hang her up by her toes!”
Kris responded with a lighthearted laugh, “nope, I did that last night.”

When Kris and I left the school before I could get into her car she grabbed me and gave me a huge hug. “Oh my baby sister! I am so proud, I knew I didn’t raise a dumbass!”

2 comments:

  1. Well, I am a critic. Even in high school debate I was always the "devils advocate" because I can argue any side and usually come on top. That being said, I felt that this story was somewhat sophomoric. I didn't really enjoy the story that much, and I thought that it was very...well, I will say that this is a GREAT first draft. But, story-wise, it is lacking in my opinion. I like the concept, the idea, the 'almost' conceit, but there were so many grammatical errors that it was just really irritating to read because this is our final. We all make mistakes, but there were so many grammar errors, that it was just off putting. In reality all I can say is that it seemed like a rough draft, not thought through, and just posted. I think if you had read the story OUT LOUD to yourself (which helps me a lot) you would have caught the errors and the weird sentence structures; you would have noticed that it didn't flow or sound 'right' or normal. But most of all, an interesting concept, but ruined with grammar. I'm sorry!

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  2. The part I liked most about your story was Kris and Sandra’s relationship. While they are sisters, Sandra says that “Kris is more like my mom to me at times than a sister”. Sandra plays a lot of roles in Kris’ life: she is her mother, her sister and her friend. Kris is able to play these roles effectively in different scenarios and in doing so is able to give Sandra the support she needs in this time in her life where she seems to be at a crossroads. For example, she is able to be motherly when she was watching over her and her brother on family vacations. She is able to be sisterly when she has to convince her mother and father not to punish Sandra after she failed her entrance exam. Lastly, she has the ability to be a friend to Sandra during the scene at Taco Bell. After Sandra fails her exam, “Kris wrinkled her nose raised her eyebrow as she peered at me, “Sandra you didn’t test at a fifth grade level when you were a fifth grader. ... Did you do fail on purpose?”” To me, this seems like dialogue between two really good friends. While friends care for and love each other, they can sometimes be rather critical. Kris’ active role in Sandra’s life is important because it gives us a better idea of who Sandra really is and gives us more insight as a reader on Sandra’s motives and choices. I also liked the scene where Kris tried to bribe Sandra with a new dye job if she passed her entrance exam. A little comic relief in this moment was perfect, as Sandra was still uncomfortable with the idea of attending her new school.
    If I were to change anything about the story, it would be to explain to the reader the reason for Sandra’s parent’s absence in her life. Perhaps they were busy with work or maybe they were just absentee parents – but whatever the case, I feel like there should have been some reason for Kris’ sometimes over-activity in Kris’ life. Kris even teaches Sandra how to ride a bicycle, which is something a parent usually does. Or maybe the fault is not on the parents: maybe Sandra has bum ovaries and is unable to conceive children, so she takes Kris under her wing and treats her like her own child.
    The counselor, Mrs. Peggy, reminded me a lot of Mrs. Peterson in “Robert E. Lee is Dead”. She seemed really catty and ready to pounce on Kris for failing the entrance exam, much like Mrs. Peterson hissed at Crystal to be careful of the company she kept. Kris’ character seems to be a combination of Crystal and Geena’s characters in “Robert E. Lee is Dead”. Kris is extremely intelligent and scores high on exams, much like Crystal, but she also fails the exam on purpose to avoid losing her friends, which is something Geena would do.
    Very nice work, Denise!

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